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Tropical Pacific Observing System
https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fmars.2019.00031/full?utm_source=F-AAE&utm_medium=EMLF&utm_campaign=MRK_932429_45_Marine_20190312_arts_A
评论:这个标题有点太“利索”了。
【1】This paper reviews the design of the Tropical Pacific Observing System (TPOS) and its governance and takes a forward look at prospective change.
评论:我会加逗号“,and takes a forward look”。takes a forward look at prospective change不需要forward。
【2】The initial findings of the TPOS 2020 Project embrace new strategic approaches and technologies in a user-driven design and the variable focus of the Framework for Ocean Observing.
评论:不知道and the variable focus of the Framework for Ocean Observing是在哪个动词或介词后面。
好好学习:The initial findings of
【3】User requirements arise from climate prediction and research, climate change and the climate record, and coupled modeling and data assimilation more generally.
评论:User requirements arise from A, B, C, and D? 搞得清A, B, C and D是谁?
【4】Requirements include focus on the upper ocean and air-sea interactions, sampling of diurnal variations, finer spatial scales and emerging demands related to biogeochemistry and ecosystems.
评论:Requirements include focus on A, B, C and D? 搞得清A, B, C and D是谁?
【5】One aim is to sample a diversity of climatic regimes in addition to the equatorial zone.
【6】The status and outlook for meeting the requirements of the design are discussed.
【7】This is accomplished through integrated and complementary capabilities of networks, including satellites, moorings, profiling floats and autonomous vehicles.
评论:including A, B, C and D?
【8】Emerging technologies and methods are also discussed.
【9】The outlook highlights a few new foci of the design: biogeochemistry and ecosystems, low-latitude western boundary currents and the eastern Pacific.
【10】Low latitude western boundary currents are conduits of tropical-subtropical interactions, supplying waters of mid to high latitude origin to the western equatorial Pacific and into the Indonesian Throughflow.
评论:Low latitude应该是Low-latitude(因为前面用了-)。mid to high latitude origin应该是mid-to-high latitude origin。to the western equatorial Pacific and into the Indonesian Throughflow不需要into。
【11】They are an essential part of the recharge/discharge of equatorial warm water volume at interannual timescales and play crucial roles in climate variability on regional and global scales.
【12】The tropical eastern Pacific, where extreme El Niño events develop, requires tailored approaches owing to the complex of processes at work there involving coastal upwelling, and equatorial cold tongue dynamics, the oxygen minimum zone and the seasonal double Intertropical Convergence Zone.
评论:involving后面多了一个and。
【13】A pilot program building on existing networks is envisaged, complemented by a process study of the East Pacific ITCZ/warm pool/cold tongue/stratus coupled system.
评论:用the eastern Pacific。
【14】The sustainability of TPOS depends on effective and strong collaborative partnerships and governance arrangements.
【15】Revisiting regional mechanisms and engaging new partners in the context of a planned and systematic design will ensure a multi-purpose, multi-faceted integrated approach that is sustainable and responsive to changing needs.
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